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Tuesday, January 29, 2013

Hook #2

My life began the day I turned eighteen and fell off a planet for the first time. Up until then I hadn't started living--I had just existed.


Huntress said...

Good Voice. Definitely sci-fi.

I'd keep going. Hooked.

Alicia C. said...

Agree with Huntress. Good voice. I do think the second sentence is a bit redundant and unnecessary. I want to know more about this falling off planet thing!