Candance Crystelle's perfect life vanishes into nothing when her wing is broken, her mother dissolves her betrothed marriage and her sister, the future queen, banishes her from the kingdom.
Her wing?! Oh, cool. And the bit about the sister creates a bunch of questions in my mind. The good kind that piques my interest.
It is the phrase ‘…her mother dissolves her betrothed marriage…’ that slowed me down. Conflict is right on the mark. My problem is with the wording.
Maybe it reads better, ‘…her mother breaks her engagement…’ Or something with more Voice. ‘…her mother destroys her wedding plans,’ ‘…mother ruins her betrothal,’ ‘…kills her wedding plans’.
The part about the broken wing *really* made me sit up J