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Tuesday, July 12, 2011
#3 One-Line Pitch Example
Title: Of Oak & Daemons
Genre: Urban Fantasy
After inheriting a preternatural rapier, Lee Amber Sterling accepts talking swords and daemons are real; accepting she is at war with the daemons is where she draws the line.
I agree with Brooke; the word accept (or variations of) should only be used once. maybe this: After inheriting a preternatural rapier, Lee Amber Sterling accepts talking swords and daemons as real, but making war upon the daemons is where she draws the line.
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I like your pitches. :) I found you via Alex's blog and thought I'd hop over. I'm a new follower.
The repitive use of forms of 'accept' kind of throws off the rhythm.
Perhaps you could reword the last part as such:
being at war with daemons is where she draws the line
I'm a new follower! Love the sound of your blog's purpose.
I agree with Brooke; the word accept (or variations of) should only be used once. maybe this: After inheriting a preternatural rapier, Lee Amber Sterling accepts talking swords and daemons as real, but making war upon the daemons is where she draws the line.
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