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Tuesday, July 12, 2011

#3 One-Line Pitch Example

Title: Of Oak & Daemons
Genre: Urban Fantasy

After inheriting a preternatural rapier, Lee Amber Sterling accepts talking swords and daemons are real; accepting she is at war with the daemons is where she draws the line.


5 comments:

Ciara said...

I like your pitches. :) I found you via Alex's blog and thought I'd hop over. I'm a new follower.

Brooke R. Busse said...

The repitive use of forms of 'accept' kind of throws off the rhythm.

Brooke R. Busse said...

Perhaps you could reword the last part as such:

being at war with daemons is where she draws the line

Trisha said...

I'm a new follower! Love the sound of your blog's purpose.

mshatch said...

I agree with Brooke; the word accept (or variations of) should only be used once. maybe this: After inheriting a preternatural rapier, Lee Amber Sterling accepts talking swords and daemons as real, but making war upon the daemons is where she draws the line.