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Tuesday, January 24, 2012

#1 A Shining Moment

Title: Sendek The Magic Wakes
Genre: Science Fantasy

She squeezed his hand and looked him in the eyes. “It wasn’t the tram you know, and I kissed you back.”

“What?” Landry’s eyes widened a bit at the change in conversation.

Talia chewed on her bottom lip for a moment. “The kiss. You shouldn’t apologize. Unless you regret it?”

“The only thing I regret is the timing. Emotions are high, and it could have been our way of dealing with survivor's guilt.”

“Are you trying to convince me or yourself?”

“I don’t know. Both? This is just out of nowhere. A week ago we couldn’t stand to be in the same room together.”

“That’s true.”Talia pulled her hands from his and gathered their plates. She turned away and walked to the sink. “You’re right of course, it probably was the tram.”

Landry jumped up and followed, reaching for her arm. “Wait.”

She jerked her arm out of his grasp and set the dishes in the sink before turning to glare at him. “What? Are you going to find some other way to deny the attraction between us? Don’t forget that I’ve heard your thoughts.”


Huntress said...

That last line absolutely nails this scene. I feel doubt, uncertainty, and tentative outreach from the characters. They wonder if what they feel is real or if it was the circumstances. I’m betting the former. LOL.

Angela Brown said...

The tension is palpable. In this snippet provided, I sense how unsure these characters are, the push-and-pull of their tenuous relationship. I get the clear feeling they didn't experience that dreamy "love at first sight" bond :-)

mshatch said...

makes me want to read the scene before and the scene that comes next. What happened that made them kiss? Why does he make excuses for it? What's going to happen next? The fact that I want to know more tells me that this is working.