Thank you for your first sentence submissions! I hope the comments were helpful in some way.
Now, lets talk about those other hooks I mentioned on Tuesday. Once you have the reader's attention, you want to keep it. You do that by hooking them at every opportunity. The beginning of every scene/chapter and the end of every scene/chapter.
I admit, this is something I'm still working on. Some of my chapter endings make it easy to put the book down--bad!
Collins was brilliant in her breaking the scene in half with her chapter breaks. That's how she kept you reading. You had to start the next chapter to see how Katniss made it through the immediate conflict/task. And then Collins started a new conflict before the end of the chapter making it VERY hard to find a place to put the book down and go to sleep.
Now, we can't all copy Collins because we have our own voices. But, think about ending each scene with a cliffhanger (hook) so the reader has to turn the page.
Here are some of the last sentences from Sendek. Some of them work as hooks. Most of them don't. Granted they work better with the context of what comes before. For the most part I have a lot of work ahead of me based just on my endings. I bolded my favorites.
It was a high price to pay--his soul--but the demon would prolong his life and give him strength to carry out his plan for revenge.
How I wished he were here to comfort me now.
He hoped the magic of dragons would help him return to Dailya when all of this was over.
There were mages somewhere on the planet and he needed to find them.
I sighed as part of me wanted to accept his invitation.
Whatever potential he has will be wasted if he follows me onto the tram.
16 (scene break)
The whispers of his mind didn't have time to register before everything went black.
He trembled as he heard the lock click in the door behind him.
"Too bad for you this is the hell I came from."
29 (scene break)
My stomach flip-flopped as I realized I was about to meet more people like me. (This is a horrible sentence!)
34 (scene break)
I gathered the energy until I exploded.
Look through your manuscript and just read the last sentences. Make a list if needed so you can see all of them at once. It is amazing what you can learn about your writing.
I just learned that Talia passes out A LOT. I need to fix that.
Take a look and share what you learn about your MS and some of your favorite last sentences as well!