David and Cat: top graduates and best friends, until he
discovers she is next in line for a hereditary throne that should not exist on
their planet.
I keep
stumbling over ‘…that should not exist…’ and I don’t know why.
Otherwise I'd definitely read on.
Sounds compelling! I'd read on - it sounds intriguing.
ReplyDeleteMaybe it's that "should not" could be the contraction "shouldn't"?
ReplyDeleteTop graduates of what?
ReplyDeleteThis is my longer one:
ReplyDeleteTop graduates ever from the Academy of Demia, David and Catrine were a team until he discovers she is next in line for a hereditary throne -- one that should not even exist on a planet that valued merit over birthright.
Won't work for twitter, but has all the info.