Day Three - Hooks

Some of these hook lines are famous. Others rather obscure. A few are tongue in cheek with little or no work on my part. Several are genuine lines to crit.

Submit from 20 words to 40 – 50 or whatever best suits your hook. Just remember, more words do not a hook make.
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Hook #15

“ I've watched through his eyes, I've listened through his ears, and I tell you he’s the one. Or at least as close as we’re going to get.”

A famous book that I hadn't read until last year, Ender's Game by Orson Scott Card

Hook #14

I tossed my backpack in a corner of the studio and high-fived Rodney on his way out. “Hey, Kitty, thanks again for taking the midnight shift,” he said. 

He’d started playing some third-generation grunge band that made my hackles rise, but I smiled anyway.

A delightful surprise, Kitty and the Midnight Hour by Carrie Vaughn. This continues as the 'Kitty' series. 

Hook #13

“All I ask is that you pick up your sh*t so you don’t leave your bedroom looking like it was used for a gang bang. Also, sorry that your girlfriend dumped you.”


I was laughing so hard while reading this book, the hubby nearly performed CPR on me. Sh*t My Dad Says - Justin Halpern

Hook #12

The hill people and the Mexicans arrived on the same day.

A fantastic book written by a well-established author, A Painted House by John Grisham

Hook #11

There is one mirror in my house. It is behind a sliding panel in the hallway upstairs. Our faction allows me to stand in front of it on the second day of every third month, the day my mother cuts my hair.


YAY, someone guessed. Divergent by Veronica Roth

Day Two - Hooks

Some of these hook lines are famous. Others rather obscure. A few are tongue in cheek with little or no work on my part. Several are genuine lines to crit.

Submit from 20 words to 40 – 50 or whatever best suits your hook. Just remember, more words do not a hook make. 

Submit to unicornbellsubmissions.gmail.com

Hook #10

I’d been waiting for the vampire for years when he walked into the bar.

The famous first line to a famous first book of the Sookie Stackhouse series by Charlaine Harris, Dead Until Dark. TV show is True Blood.

Hook #9

I hadn't enjoyed a hangover since my University days with Vicki and Grey, and this one wasn't any different.

Hook #8

I sat packed into the back of a hummer with a bunch of Army guys. The convoy I’d joined currently headed to a compound where a local school was located. The air inside the cab was stale and charged with a nervous energy.

Hook #7

Before the car pulled into the driveway I knew whoever was inside had a hold on me.

“Is that a new one?” Greg slid off the trunk of my car and started stretching for our run.
“Guess so.” I shrugged. 

The car pulled along the sidewalk and the man driving got out.

Hook #6

Statistics show that most mortals sell their souls for five reasons: sex, money, power, revenge, and love. In that order.

Debut novel of Richelle Mead. Succubus Blues.

Say it. Out Loud. "Hook."

Some of these hook lines are famous. Others rather obscure. A few are tongue in cheek with little or no work on my part. Several are genuine lines to crit.

Changing horses in midstream. A woman’s prerogative. Fickle: thy name is woman.

I subtly changed the rules from 20 words to 40 – 50. Submit whatever best suits your hook. Just remember, more words do not a hook make. 

Submit to unicornbellsubmissions.gmail.com

Hook #5

I didn’t realize he was a werewolf at first. My nose isn’t at its best when surrounded by axle grease and burnt oil – and it’s not like there are a lot a stray werewolves running around


A great series and author.

Moon Called - Patricia Briggs, the Mercy Thompson series

Hook #4

When I wake up, the other side of the bed is cold. My fingers stretch out, seeking Prim’s warmth but finding only the rough canvas cover of the mattress. 

You guessed it.

The Hunger Games - Suzanne Collins

Hook #3

He had always intended to come back, to see the island. Again. But the opportunity had never quite presented itself. 

One of my favorite books and movies.

Summer of '42 - Herman Raucher

Hook #2

My life began the day I turned eighteen and fell off a planet for the first time. Up until then I hadn't started living--I had just existed.