tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post8197375470114216641..comments2023-08-01T05:26:06.539-05:00Comments on Unicorn Bell: Too Many Words Spoil the MessageHuntresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-86268205767542669352012-03-21T19:49:33.011-05:002012-03-21T19:49:33.011-05:00I'm a big advocate of cutting out the non-comm...I'm a big advocate of cutting out the non-committal phrases. <br /><br />Don't start to cross the room. CROSS IT! The only time you should "begin" to do something is if half way through the action, something else more exciting interrupts it.Kimberlee Turleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04695299361596799423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-38214101668644956752012-03-20T23:53:15.223-05:002012-03-20T23:53:15.223-05:00"The vole huddled in terror beneath a fallen ..."The vole huddled in terror beneath a fallen tree."<br /><br />I tend to be verbose however :)<br /><br />........dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-43960694027526910272012-03-20T14:01:31.236-05:002012-03-20T14:01:31.236-05:00kiss, right?
but then i hear i need more descrip...kiss, right? <br /><br />but then i hear i need more descriptive words...i guess it depends on the action<br />the above sentence is described in effective detail, but if the scene isnt important then, "the frightened vole hid in a log."Tara Tylerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07587802105993889515noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-3570871100033432322012-03-20T05:41:25.613-05:002012-03-20T05:41:25.613-05:00eek... I wrote a first draft a year ago, promptly ...eek... I wrote a first draft a year ago, promptly got terrified and put the thing away. Maybe it's time to unearth and simplify. Good advice<br />LxLaurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03604785269958873474noreply@blogger.com