tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post7379285218468563821..comments2023-08-01T05:26:06.539-05:00Comments on Unicorn Bell: Where am I?Huntresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-38141614496249145122011-12-19T14:48:07.652-06:002011-12-19T14:48:07.652-06:00I always feel like I don't write enough descri...I always feel like I don't write enough description so I add more. I am then told I still don't have enough. Another thing to tack onto my list of things to improve.Brooke R. Bussehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17147444223968856153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-7682893735178348192011-12-12T13:51:06.864-06:002011-12-12T13:51:06.864-06:00I love good descriptive scenes--as long as they ar...I love good descriptive scenes--as long as they are sprinkled in with everything else. <br /><br />My story needs more world building, but I've avoided it because its very easy for me to really get into the details of my setting. I loves them so much!Charity Bradfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01960821077619680661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-82099208313492672692011-12-12T11:32:16.250-06:002011-12-12T11:32:16.250-06:00Oh yes, description is very important. The key is ...Oh yes, description is very important. The key is finding the balance between too much and not enough. I tend to like a little more because I want to be completely immersed in the world I'm reading about - regardless of genre. But when there's action, that's the time to cut description to a minimum. I think it also helps if description is interspersed with dialogue or thought, to break it up. Because while I want to picture in my mind where I am I tend to skip over big long chunks of description. When I go home tonight I'll see if I can find something of my own that might merit posting...mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-71456336745998107372011-12-12T11:31:47.280-06:002011-12-12T11:31:47.280-06:00Oddly, the first one made me wonder if we were in ...Oddly, the first one made me wonder if we were in a submarine...a very old one.<br /><br />For some reason, and I don't think it should have been the case, I knew the second one was fantasy the moment I read "old forest untouched for ten thousand years". I should have recognized it since I've read the first book in the Song of Ice and Fire series but I didn't. Something about that phrasing...hmmm...Angela Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03324366495151363782noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-81011570210400276852011-12-12T09:26:57.324-06:002011-12-12T09:26:57.324-06:00Setting details are tricky. You don't want to ...Setting details are tricky. You don't want to have a purple prose condition, but you want to engross the reader. It is a delicate balance. I'm a new follower. Thank you so much for your comment about my new trailer at Alex's blog.Ciarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15628488753277495111noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-65595030324430576392011-12-12T08:47:41.312-06:002011-12-12T08:47:41.312-06:00I like the books by author Martin. But I had to ma...I like the books by author Martin. But I had to make a conscious effort to focus on the scenes, the unfamiliar names, and location. <br />Why? <br />Conflict. From the first page on, the reader hardly has a chance to draw a breath. It was the catalyst for my decision to work at understanding his world.<br />Note the argument on the first page between a smarmy lording and his subordinate. The reader falls into the conflict and wants more.<br />Descriptions give the reader a backdrop for the story but in this case, Martin also gave the above scene life. Note these words: primal, untouched, moist earth and decay, crowded close, misshapen roots.<br />He could have used words like, scary, black, old, smelly. But no. Martin used words that live. They create a forceful image that explodes into the mind.Huntresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-27398429339324062282011-12-12T07:39:33.818-06:002011-12-12T07:39:33.818-06:00I liked the first excerpt, but I had a moment of d...I liked the first excerpt, but I had a moment of disconnect when I got to where the character states '[i]t was a familiar sensation, one I didn't even think of now, and certainly not one I noticed'. Um, wasn't the character just thinking about noticing the feeling?<br /><br />I know I'm being super picky, and I did like the description until that point, but that line reminded me I was reading (part of) a book.Sophiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926811798176739307noreply@blogger.com