tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post5837658936053223097..comments2023-08-01T05:26:06.539-05:00Comments on Unicorn Bell: Dialogue: the life of the storyHuntresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-33159214308876824702012-05-29T09:23:26.491-05:002012-05-29T09:23:26.491-05:00Hello! I joined just this morning and I am looking...Hello! I joined just this morning and I am looking forward to participating in this exciting blog! I have already enjoyed everything I've read so far!<br />Dialogue can be challenge and the writing must really be in character when putting their words on paper. It's a challenge I need to tackle!Ink in the Bookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03117718811407968345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-9005653140955078682012-05-29T06:38:32.569-05:002012-05-29T06:38:32.569-05:00This will come up under realism vs. what the story...This will come up under realism vs. what the story needs -- since rambling is perfectly normal IRL, as you say, but can be a problem in a story if the characters head off on a tangent.<br /><br />The challenge is getting the conversation to "naturally" ramble in the direction of the writer's choosing :)blankenship.louisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05541461775158369620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-58086809040487422102012-05-29T01:26:15.600-05:002012-05-29T01:26:15.600-05:00I know I ramble on and on in RL to people I know (...I know I ramble on and on in RL to people I know (my family can attest to this), but tend to be tight-lipped in less known territory. Yet much of my writing, whatever tangent it goes on, doesn't ramble quite as much as I. I’d say it’s because I control both sides, but pfft, what do I know about linear talking?<br /><br />Here’s an example from piece I wrote yesterday. It’s full of stuff like this:<br />*small bit about noticing book is same as the one she lost before her kidnapping*<br />“Quite the humorous read.” He patted the leather cover as if it were some old, faithful hound. “Though I must say the kingdoms wouldn’t be quite as pleasant as they’re depicted in these pages. They’ve many myths about us and we’re often viewed as ... unwelcomed visitors.”<br />Hugging herself, she rubbed at an arm. “The kingdom or its Lord?”<br />“Both.” Lucias leant back in his seat and nodded at the curtained window. “Tell me, what do you see?”<br />*Bit about what she sees out window. More dialogue*<br /><br />Often my non-pov dialogue is broken like this (different piece):<br />*action, description& whatnot*<br />“Come on! Come on!” a man bellowed, thrusting his torch into the wagon. “Step out or be dragged out, your choice.” He laughed. “Be the last you’ll ever get.”<br />*action, description& whatnot*<br /><br />Though if it’s the MC’s dialogue, it’ll probably be:<br />*dialogue, action, internalisation, action, more dialogue/internalisation*<br /><br />(As I said, I ramble. ^_^)Aldrea Alienhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05652344290376563676noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-76643863700761943782012-05-29T00:52:04.506-05:002012-05-29T00:52:04.506-05:00@Aldrea: Been there, loads of times, lol. I tend...@Aldrea: Been there, loads of times, lol. I tend to get chatty in dialogue and have to cut out mannerism tags and filler. I wonder if I talk that way in real life :)<br /><br />.......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-90487991179180853752012-05-28T22:03:32.359-05:002012-05-28T22:03:32.359-05:00Been looking at the dialogue I have and one thing ...Been looking at the dialogue I have and one thing strikes me: there's often a lot of action or internalisation going on between the actual speaky bits. But then, I know of no one who just naturally stands there and yaks. I tend to do a lot of hand waving.<br /><br />When first writing anything talky bits, I tend to have a problem with wandering dialogue. I get a start and I have a finish to aim for or some point that needs slipping in, but somewhere along the way, the "chat" takes the scenic route. I've no idea how it ends up making sense in the end, but it seems to work itself out.Aldrea Alienhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05652344290376563676noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-87765108533279214742012-05-28T18:29:24.743-05:002012-05-28T18:29:24.743-05:00Great post! Thanks! I am still working on figuring...Great post! Thanks! I am still working on figuring out dialogue. My mom had me take Latin for many moons as a young child. gak. It was. um. wonderful. BUT! I'll tell you what. I know quite a bit about HOW words are built, where they come from...and so forth. Not sure how that helps me. But it MUST! I find that with dialect, watching british comedies helps a great deal. Trying to hear how they talk to each other. The different exclamations! And so much getting said with just a word. It's great. I do find that for writers, Diana Gabaldon stands out for decent dialogue. most of her scenes are dialogue driven. And, for me anyway, she can make me get lost in a scene.Alicia Willette-Cookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02174871217832164495noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-16371728594446180732012-05-28T17:03:27.616-05:002012-05-28T17:03:27.616-05:00Yeah, dialog can be hard. I know I don't do it...Yeah, dialog can be hard. I know I don't do it well.Liz A.https://www.blogger.com/profile/16531953467834426316noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-51213640192352422642012-05-28T16:37:36.924-05:002012-05-28T16:37:36.924-05:00"Justified" is my example of great dialo..."Justified" is my example of great dialogue.<br /><br />I am researching Australian speech at the moment, checking out news programs etc for syntax examples.Huntresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-25248819099095115532012-05-28T14:42:16.282-05:002012-05-28T14:42:16.282-05:00Heh, well that's as much an indictment of Caru...Heh, well that's as much an indictment of Caruso's acting ability as the writing... :)blankenship.louisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05541461775158369620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-53563912082507433762012-05-28T13:45:10.485-05:002012-05-28T13:45:10.485-05:00Love the post. I'll send you some dialogue L....Love the post. I'll send you some dialogue L. Should be fun to see what you make of it. Dialects are hardest to do in a story.<br /><br />.......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-43793596345726474152012-05-28T09:43:58.752-05:002012-05-28T09:43:58.752-05:00What an offer. I don't have anything to crit r...What an offer. I don't have anything to crit right now but I love your points.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12160669603997465454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-55651324759904278562012-05-28T09:24:38.609-05:002012-05-28T09:24:38.609-05:00Now that I think about it, bad dialogue (and way t...Now that I think about it, bad dialogue (and way too much telling rather than showing) is probably what ruined the last book I read. It was supposed to be YA but the mc talked and acted with the confidence of someone much older. It annoyed me.mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-62855653171910386302012-05-28T09:20:06.830-05:002012-05-28T09:20:06.830-05:00What really puts my panties in a wad is watching a...What really puts my panties in a wad is watching a period movie and hearing contemporary slang. And re: CSI, at least Miami CSI (reruns), I can predict every head tilt and sideways glance of David Caruso.Karen Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01522178275164058849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-62161075672332893322012-05-28T09:05:22.459-05:002012-05-28T09:05:22.459-05:00I watched CSI once in my life and couldn't sta...I watched CSI once in my life and couldn't stand all the exposition and on the nose dialogue so I never watched it again.Brent Wescotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08313269993916969201noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-7156642390907073552012-05-28T08:43:57.473-05:002012-05-28T08:43:57.473-05:00Great post L. Dialogue is one of the things that r...Great post L. Dialogue is one of the things that really do make or break the story. How many times have I rolled my eyes and thought "they would never say that!"<br /><br />I'm looking forward to seeing the submissions this week as well. I love good dialogue when I could get it.Charity Bradfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01960821077619680661noreply@blogger.com