tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post4478063313864178611..comments2023-08-01T05:26:06.539-05:00Comments on Unicorn Bell: QueryCon 2013—#7 She Flies with Her Own WingsHuntresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-48231588534992250812013-09-27T15:44:15.254-05:002013-09-27T15:44:15.254-05:00I enjoyed this query though it's not the sort ...I enjoyed this query though it's not the sort of thing we generally publish. The only advice I could give is to try and create more of a hook earlier on. The 4th paragraph is really well done. But up until that point I wasn't overly interested. Some agents/publishers will only read the first paragraph of a query, it has to grip the reader immediately. Keep up the great work!abuckley23https://www.blogger.com/profile/10198891095614021346noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-54607456443142491812013-09-27T13:46:49.474-05:002013-09-27T13:46:49.474-05:00I particularly like the 4th paragraph of this quer...I particularly like the 4th paragraph of this query and think this one hits all of my requirements. I think this sounds promising and would love to read the full.<br /><br />If you'd like, please send me the full manuscript (along with the original query) at victoria@thebentagency.com.<br /><br />Good job!Victoria Cappellohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17274794866815300695noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-49800523237998287802013-09-24T21:08:24.931-05:002013-09-24T21:08:24.931-05:00Okay, I don't have much to say about this quer...Okay, I don't have much to say about this query. That's a good thing. Having read some of Sarah Dessen's work, I can see the parallel you've drawn between this story and her novels. I enjoyed the query and if I represented NA, I would definitely request a full for this manuscript. Great Job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11199784248310464713noreply@blogger.com