tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post6411763069408561334..comments2023-08-01T05:26:06.539-05:00Comments on Unicorn Bell: Critting OUT OF TOUCH: take 2Huntresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-73857586879343137872013-10-18T10:51:55.064-05:002013-10-18T10:51:55.064-05:00I agree that this is better. The next day I rewor...I agree that this is better. The next day I reworked it again and sent that version to the Unicorn Bell website. I was hoping that if you critted something, it would be that since I think it is better yet. I got rid of the prologue altogether and started with the garage sale. I appreciate your suggestions here. I will take them into account and make some changes.Robinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14932408372240147454noreply@blogger.com