tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post553160443210183643..comments2023-08-01T05:26:06.539-05:00Comments on Unicorn Bell: Kisses from Yesterday - continued...Huntresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-18755825625113057832015-07-31T13:36:55.727-05:002015-07-31T13:36:55.727-05:00Thanks, Marcy! The Jenkins become very important ...Thanks, Marcy! The Jenkins become very important to Alexis, but you may be right in that she bonded too quickly with them. This convinces me that I definitely need to introduce Albert here. I think I also need to get across why she decided to wait until later to explore the rest of the house. There is electricity, but she's got a four-hour drive back to Atlanta ahead of her, which will put her getting back to Atlanta at roughly 1:00 am, since it's between 8:00 and 9:00 pm now.<br /><br />In the original chapter that contained Albert, he invites her to their house to eat supper with them and to meet his wife, and this part took place after she went to their house. The two weeks later part was actually the beginning of chapter two, and it contained references to the fact that Alexis had been spending a lot of time with them over the course of those two weeks as she was moving in.<br /><br />I definitely need to rethink the layout of the chapter and address the issues you've brought up. This manuscript is in extensive edits, and I wanted to see how well this chapter was working. You've helped me see that there are some areas that work, and other areas that don't work so well. I really appreciate all the time you've taken to look at this chapter!Angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15134478652819994383noreply@blogger.com