tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post4056130122222862246..comments2023-08-01T05:26:06.539-05:00Comments on Unicorn Bell: Writing Strong Part IIHuntresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-45025952380478776952011-11-05T11:29:16.726-05:002011-11-05T11:29:16.726-05:00I talk in double verbs.I talk in double verbs.Huntresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-16308612805009257202011-11-05T10:31:01.754-05:002011-11-05T10:31:01.754-05:00I find it easy to slip into passive voice - and re...I find it easy to slip into passive voice - and really hard to see that I've done it. Must remember to look out for this when editing.Patsyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12263765378083045973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-41586946348836921102011-11-04T21:52:40.000-05:002011-11-04T21:52:40.000-05:00great blog and topic... reminds me to keep them as...great blog and topic... reminds me to keep them as a minimum:)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-89463132137671809392011-11-04T17:47:01.750-05:002011-11-04T17:47:01.750-05:00my first drafts are often more passively written, ...my first drafts are often more passively written, until I start revising. Then all those passive verbs stick out like an apple in an onion field.mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-41434369302951777392011-11-04T11:44:44.245-05:002011-11-04T11:44:44.245-05:00i've always agreed with "was" is wea...i've always agreed with "was" is weak =)<br />it's ok to use sometimes, like in descriptions.<br />but for action and intensity and just keeping a scene moving along, stronger verbs work best.Tara Tylerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07587802105993889515noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-30221185526369018992011-11-04T06:57:40.922-05:002011-11-04T06:57:40.922-05:00It's funny, as I was reading the first example...It's funny, as I was reading the first examples of grammatically-correct-yet-less-punchy lines, I was immediately thinking of ways to add action. What I thought of was very close to the punchier revisions provided.Angela Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03324366495151363782noreply@blogger.com