tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post2128327939380027319..comments2023-08-01T05:26:06.539-05:00Comments on Unicorn Bell: Mirror MirrorHuntresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-10001288649302881672012-12-09T10:19:02.318-06:002012-12-09T10:19:02.318-06:00Maybe someday I'll finish the dragon story, bu...Maybe someday I'll finish the dragon story, but not likely any time soon. Their culture is just too complex, and I need to explore it from outside for a while before I try to dive into it.<br /><br />LaurenLaurenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04137538450232783883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-12007121645750615572012-12-08T00:13:03.591-06:002012-12-08T00:13:03.591-06:00Having read other books of yours, I took for grant...Having read other books of yours, I took for granted some of the compliments mentioned here. (That in itself is a compliment, I assure you.) And yes, I find the flavor of magic you're employing here to be intriguing. But you know I loved the paragraph with the dragon most, right? They add a dimension to tales that simply captivates me.<br /><br />If I had to get nit picky on anything, it would have been the "muttered something" phrase. I wanted to know what it was or why the narrator couldn't tell me. (too quiet to hear? a different language? etc.)<br /><br />I always enjoy a little Lauren writing. :)Jeff Hargetthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14198367021884647821noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-66705202859006214762012-12-06T23:23:02.851-06:002012-12-06T23:23:02.851-06:00I removed the random paragraph, since it really do...I removed the random paragraph, since it really doesn't play into the rest of the book. Thanks again!Laurenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04137538450232783883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-28284090355083312472012-12-06T16:00:48.885-06:002012-12-06T16:00:48.885-06:00Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
LaurenThanks! I'm glad you liked it.<br /><br />LaurenLaurenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04137538450232783883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-57691507923347306222012-12-06T11:06:52.356-06:002012-12-06T11:06:52.356-06:00Goodness! Love it, and don't really have anyth...Goodness! Love it, and don't really have anything to add to Marcy's comments. I just wanted to say I agreed with her about the random paragraph, and say great job!Charity Bradfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01960821077619680661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-34590355968127485872012-12-06T10:04:40.353-06:002012-12-06T10:04:40.353-06:00Fascinating! I'd definitely turn the page. But...Fascinating! I'd definitely turn the page. But I agree with Marcy that the paragraph about the plants seems out of place. Patchihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09097638657085263738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-44209401109349322352012-12-06T09:35:20.850-06:002012-12-06T09:35:20.850-06:00Yes, Maerset is trapped in the tower. In a sense,...Yes, Maerset is trapped in the tower. In a sense, this is Rapunzel. Or at least, that's the way it started.<br /><br />LaurenLaurenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04137538450232783883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-64267835682230714142012-12-06T09:33:20.445-06:002012-12-06T09:33:20.445-06:00Thanks! I try to make my openings active--there&#...Thanks! I try to make my openings active--there's nothing more boring than reading a whole page of introspection at the beginning of a book.<br /><br />Almost.<br /><br />LaurenLaurenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04137538450232783883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-78452525166152986612012-12-06T08:07:47.515-06:002012-12-06T08:07:47.515-06:00good call, Huntress; you know I have trouble with ...good call, Huntress; you know I have trouble with those so I'm glad you're here to spot them!mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-84833451342082886052012-12-06T07:05:56.756-06:002012-12-06T07:05:56.756-06:00I'd turn the page. IMO, this seems very unique...I'd turn the page. IMO, this seems very unique and a good start. I agree with Marcy about the active verbs. Good job.<br /><br />My one crit is to edit out some of the 'ing' words. Huntresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.com