tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post137632358054550905..comments2023-08-01T05:26:06.539-05:00Comments on Unicorn Bell: Kisses from Yesterday - continued...Huntresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-4712434029646795812015-07-31T13:03:44.889-05:002015-07-31T13:03:44.889-05:00LOL! I was worried about leaving the dialogue as ...LOL! I was worried about leaving the dialogue as it is. I was trying to convey Jonathan's time period, but it's obviously not working. I'll make sure I pay extra attention to the dialogue. I have other characters that are from even farther back in time than Jonathan, so I'm probably going to face some of the same issues in their dialogue as well. Thanks, Carol!Angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15134478652819994383noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4393512822627120580.post-6552385154704884062015-07-31T09:56:16.850-05:002015-07-31T09:56:16.850-05:00Again, note the sentence length. They seem about t...Again, note the sentence length. They seem about the same in the paragraphs. <br />Break them up into a beat. Waltz your way through.<br /><br />Medium, medium, Long. short short.<br /><br />Or as I love to say, listen to the lyrics of Dierks Bentley, LOL.<br />"What was I thinking."Huntresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.com