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Monday, September 23, 2013

QueryCon 2013—#7 She Flies with Her Own Wings

Title: She Flies With Her Own Wings
Genre: NA Contemporary
Name: Kara Reynolds

Anna is stuck in a rut. To be fair, though, it’s a very comfortable rut that her dad approves of, and that she dug for herself. But still, it’s time for a change.

Change comes in the form of Coy McLeod, visiting Anna’s small hometown from the far away land of Chicago. He’s as spontaneous, passionate, and independent as Anna is… not.

When Coy gets the idea to take a Shakespeare Festival road trip, Anna agrees to go along, hoping the spontaneity of the trip will help her to be more open to new things. But when she returns home, she is just as uncertain of what to do with her future as when she left. Coy has added a new choice to Anna’s list of possible future plans- he wants her to move to Chicago with him. As if things weren’t confusing enough already.

Should she finish college at her family’s alma mater, while still living at home with her widower father? Or take a chance on Coy, and step into the unknown? As time runs out on Anna’s last semester of school, it will take a proposal, a death, and The Sound of Music to bring down the curtain on her old life.

SHE FLIES WITH HER OWN WINGS is a contemporary NA novel, complete at 90,000 words. It would appeal to readers who enjoy contemporary Young Adult novels, such as those by Sarah Dessen, and are now looking for an older protagonist. Thank you for your consideration.

3 comments:

Angela Kelly said...

Okay, I don't have much to say about this query. That's a good thing. Having read some of Sarah Dessen's work, I can see the parallel you've drawn between this story and her novels. I enjoyed the query and if I represented NA, I would definitely request a full for this manuscript. Great Job!

Victoria Lowes said...

I particularly like the 4th paragraph of this query and think this one hits all of my requirements. I think this sounds promising and would love to read the full.

If you'd like, please send me the full manuscript (along with the original query) at victoria@thebentagency.com.

Good job!

abuckley23 said...

I enjoyed this query though it's not the sort of thing we generally publish. The only advice I could give is to try and create more of a hook earlier on. The 4th paragraph is really well done. But up until that point I wasn't overly interested. Some agents/publishers will only read the first paragraph of a query, it has to grip the reader immediately. Keep up the great work!