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Friday, June 28, 2013

Birth of a Tagline



It's official. I *finally* came up with a tagline for Wilder Mage. Or at least I made a decision. (how wishy-washy is THAT)

I couldn't do it without the help of the writer community. Thank you Charity, Marcy, and Patchi, who came in at the last. 



Magic. It's in his blood and out of control.



What do you think? Do I need something else? Something added? Maybe the word 'his' in front of control? *dithering*

If you think these tiny decisions are kinda dumb, that they are time sucks to nowhere, remember this quote from Oscar Wilde:

"I was working on the proof of one of my poems all the morning, and took out a comma. In the afternoon I put it back again." 

*sigh* Good to know I'm not too awful crazy. 

Thoughts anyone?

7 comments:

Patchi said...

I think it sounds better with the second "his." But that might be because I'm reading it in the morning ;)

I'm glad you can check this off your list.

Liza said...

I like the second "his" too.

Liz said...

Oooh, I like it. And yes, a second "his" might make things a bit more clear.

Aldrea Alien said...

Seems like I'm in the minority again as I prefer it without the second 'his'.

For some reason, even with knowing the context is likely to be his control we're talking about, having it 'out of control' just feels wilder to me than having it 'out of his control'.

Hmm ... does that even make sense?

cleemckenziebooks said...

Nice tag. I'm wondering how this sounds to you: Magic. It's in his blood, but out of his control.

I kind of think the two ideas are in contrast, but since I don't know your plot I'm not sure.

Good luck with this. It's not easy, is it?

mshatch said...

I'm going to disagree, no second 'his.' I like it just the way it is - a lot!

Terri Rowe said...

I have to go with a no vote to the second "his."