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Friday, February 1, 2013

Hooks, #16

I’ve been in love with Sandra Baker since the second day of the sixth grade. That’s when I stopped thinking girls had cooties and started noticing they had breasts. Nothing much has changed since then. 

2 comments:

Huntress said...

I'd cut 'started noticing' and substitute 'noticed' but other than that, HOOKED!

mshatch said...

I agree, I like this line a lot!