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Tuesday, January 29, 2013

Hooks #1


Thunder rumbled as I touched the wire-panel fence, some twenty seconds after the flash of lightning. Figuring five seconds per mile, I thought I was safe from a shock. But I was wrong.

It took me all of 1 minute to blurb this out. - Huntress

3 comments:

Patchi said...

I really like this one. Is it published?

Huntress said...

:P

Alicia C. said...

The 'But' weakens it for me. Other then that I like it! I would read on!