This week I am calling for a first chapter to crit. If you would like your first chapter critiqued here this week (I will be splitting the chapter up into four parts, one each for the remaining days of the week) send it to firstname.lastname@example.org and please include the title, genre, and intended audience as well as any specific questions about your chapter you would like answered. I will do my best to tell you where the chapter succeeds and where it fails. Does it 'hook' the reader? Does it show more than tell? Do I find the character(s) interesting enough to read on? Are there grammatical issues? Is the voice/pov working?
You, as our ever so wonderful readers, will be invited to comment and let the author know what you thought of their piece.
First come first serve.